From inside the manuscript, No. 1

How one buried sentence can make a reader question something they've believed for years

For founding members: once a month, a passage from a real manuscript I'm working on, with the client's details changed or removed.

Each month I'll pull one passage from a book I'm writing and show you two versions of it: what it looked like when it reached my desk, and what it looks like now. Then I'll walk you through the decisions I made in between. Th…